Thursday, February 14, 2013

Love Bites Blog Hop: The One

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The One

You’re not the one.

Those words drifted through his mind.  It had been months since the first time he heard them and even now they cut just as deep as the first time, ripping apart everything inside of him.  The other woman was in another room, he could hear her there rummaging through the cabinets or who knows what.  It didn’t matter to him.  None of it did.  She could have been stealing him blind for all he cared, none of it made him want to run from the covers of his bed.  He knew she would be back before long.  At least that much he was sure of.

“Hey babe, you want a drink?” 

“Sure,” was all he could say, it would numb the thoughts.  The storm of words and emotions brewing in his head that came to him in isolation.  This felt wrong, all of it, from the first touch he always thought about another and not the one he was with.  But then she had admitted much the same.  That she was in love with someone else.  Someone who she could not be with for whatever the reasons he never asked.  It was the one thing, the only thing he understood now.  How much he went through to numb the pain, the absence knowing a piece of his heart was gone forever.  But he understood, at least in this moment someone else knew his pain.  His frustration, of not being the one.

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12 comments:

  1. I wrote something, very, very different for this....but when I finally got it to a point that I wanted to post it. I didn't quite like it as much anymore...

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  2. Very poignant, two lonely people finding solace of a kind... probably not the best idea either had, but loneliness does all sorts of things to a person!

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  3. Aw, look at all the lonely people...
    It's a great entry, no doubt.
    Bittersweet, poignant (to borrow a word from Lisa), and real.
    Thank you for sharing it.

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  4. A sad and sorry tale - love really does bite!

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  5. So glad you a posted this one, such a moving tale, felt so sorry for them both.

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  6. Wow, this is so wrenching. You captured his heartache so well, put us right there in the room with him, and gave us a true whiskey sour of a story. Very powerful writing!

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  7. I'm glad you posted this. Beautifully written, capturing a moment of two lonely souls, in despair,putting up with what they have even if it's not what they really want. So sad. I a have feeling this 'relationship' will be a destructive one . . . x

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  8. Love truly bites - thank you for this.

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  9. I'm reminded of The Great Gatsby here, the scene in which Nick gets to kiss a girl but not THE girl. Well-written.

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  10. I can identify with the sentiments conveyed here. Very touching.

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  11. Deeply moving beautifully written.

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  12. Oh ouch—you carefully crafted a story we can all relate to and I ached as I read these words. Very well done.

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