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The One
You’re not the one.
Those words drifted through his mind. It had been months since the first time he
heard them and even now they cut just as deep as the first time, ripping apart
everything inside of him. The other
woman was in another room, he could hear her there rummaging through the
cabinets or who knows what. It didn’t
matter to him. None of it did. She could have been stealing him blind for
all he cared, none of it made him want to run from the covers of his bed. He knew she would be back before long. At least that much he was sure of.
“Hey babe, you want a drink?”
“Sure,” was all he could say, it would numb the thoughts. The storm of words and emotions brewing in
his head that came to him in isolation. This
felt wrong, all of it, from the first touch he always thought about another and
not the one he was with. But then she
had admitted much the same. That she was
in love with someone else. Someone who
she could not be with for whatever the reasons he never asked. It was the one thing, the only thing he
understood now. How much he went through
to numb the pain, the absence knowing a piece of his heart was gone forever. But he understood, at least in this moment
someone else knew his pain. His
frustration, of not being the one.
(245 words)
I wrote something, very, very different for this....but when I finally got it to a point that I wanted to post it. I didn't quite like it as much anymore...
ReplyDeleteVery poignant, two lonely people finding solace of a kind... probably not the best idea either had, but loneliness does all sorts of things to a person!
ReplyDeleteAw, look at all the lonely people...
ReplyDeleteIt's a great entry, no doubt.
Bittersweet, poignant (to borrow a word from Lisa), and real.
Thank you for sharing it.
A sad and sorry tale - love really does bite!
ReplyDeleteSo glad you a posted this one, such a moving tale, felt so sorry for them both.
ReplyDeleteWow, this is so wrenching. You captured his heartache so well, put us right there in the room with him, and gave us a true whiskey sour of a story. Very powerful writing!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you posted this. Beautifully written, capturing a moment of two lonely souls, in despair,putting up with what they have even if it's not what they really want. So sad. I a have feeling this 'relationship' will be a destructive one . . . x
ReplyDeleteLove truly bites - thank you for this.
ReplyDeleteI'm reminded of The Great Gatsby here, the scene in which Nick gets to kiss a girl but not THE girl. Well-written.
ReplyDeleteI can identify with the sentiments conveyed here. Very touching.
ReplyDeleteDeeply moving beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteOh ouch—you carefully crafted a story we can all relate to and I ached as I read these words. Very well done.
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