Five Sentence Fiction - Radiance
Jackson quickly pulled the tattered orange trucker hat
down over his swollen brown eyes, feeling the color rush from his face. He
leaned forward cupping his hands around the warm tea, an attempt to stop the
tremble of his hands, but could do nothing about the thundering echo of his
boots as they smacked on the concrete. He was here first, there was no reason
for him to leave when he glanced up to see her sit only a few tables away,
unaware of his presence. His heart stopped when he saw him, it was not his
appearance but the glow of bliss on her face as she greeted her new love. Jackson stood and turned
to walk away taking one final glimpse to his lost love, their eyes met, and he
smiled before he disappeared into the crowd.
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A beautiful heartbreaking scene that looks at radiance from the other side. Really really well done.
ReplyDeleteNice job illustrating radiance in such an unexpected way. I really enjoyed this story!
ReplyDeleteLovely tale of heartache. Well done!
ReplyDeleteOh, I know that precise feeling. Love the descriptions of a wrecked man who still manages a brave face when it counts. Great 5.
ReplyDeleteSo many emotions in such a short space. Nice job :)
ReplyDeleteThank you all!! I like how this one turned out.
ReplyDeleteI missed this last time around....very, very well done. I could feel the heartbreak!
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